Talk:Partnership for a Drug-Free America
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First (instructor) evaluation comments
Hi Drew,
Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft. I'm going to stick to the sections you've already begun developing; keep in mind, though, that you still need to fill in the others as well as the bibliography, related articles, and external links subpages.
- The intro section is off to a good start; you might just work on simplifying the sentence structure a little bit to make it more reader friendly.
- You might flesh out your discussion of the Partnership's founding a bit by providing more information about the historical context in which it was founded, the motivation behind it, and the steps that were taken by O'Reilly to get it off the ground. Similarly, while it might seem obvious, it would be a good idea to spell out things like why the "this is your brain on drugs" campaign was so effective in raising the Partnership's public profile.
- The "Current Campaigns and Programs" section is very effectively organized; the next step, then, is to elaborate a bit more on each of the bolded points. For example, what steps are being taken to advance the "Parents Campaign"? What is the organization doing to increase inhalants awareness?
- Throughout the article, you might put double square brackets ( i.e. [[ ]] ) around key terms to create internal links to other Citizendium articles; e.g. methamphetamine, George H. W. Bush
Shamira Gelbman 03:02, 5 October 2009 (UTC)
Second (peer) evaluation comments
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